这是我的第一篇雅思练习作文,希望大家帮我修改,谢谢
题目:8分万能作文第87页
ThisbarchartillustratesthepercentageofpeoplewhogethighereducationinChinafrom1990to2004.Itisclearthattheproportionofthepeoplereceivinghighereducationisanupwardtrend.
Ascanbeseenfromthebargraphthattherewasaslightincreasefrom1990(about4%)to1994(approximately11%)inChinesehighereducationstudentnumbers.Thefiguredoubledinthenexttwoyearsarrivedtroughly22%in1996.Afterthat,substantialsurgeinthenumberofChinesestudentsenrolledinhighereducationamounttoapproximately10%betweentheyearsfrom1996to1998andto2000respectively.AndthenumberinChinaascendedprecipitouslyfromaround45%toabout65%duringtheperiodbetweentheyears2000and2002,andthestatisticincreaseslightly6tojustunder70%.
Therefore,itcanbeclearlyseenfromthebardiagramthatthenumbersinhighereducationinChinahasadramaticalrisebetween1990and2004.
希望大家能帮我评一个分数,多指出些错误,谢谢.
另外,我8月29日第一次雅思考试,在这一个月里应该怎样练习写作?希望大家能多给我一些好的建议.